Oh man, I should have started this sooner. I didn't get anywhere near as close to finished as I wanted. Still, this is supposed to be a sort of short story deal, so maybe I typed too much? I never have been good at the whole short story thing, heh. I didn't get to use two of my planned scenes either.
Still, for all my work, it still pales by comparison to the competition. I mean, holy crap. Zal, this is the first time I've seen your work and I must say that I am highly impressed. That is just freakin' awesome.
And I think I've achieved what I wanted out of this for this round. I've learned some things about my own writing style, things I can improve on. That, and I've learned to never write about myself. Ever. I've got too much of an inflated ego for it, heh.
Righto, here's my entry.
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One Night
He got into his car, shut the door behind him quickly and then went into the ritual required to get the vehicle going. It was an old car, an '88 Honda Accord, as old as the young man trying to start it, with a maroon paint job that had been worn away on the roof. It had a few dents and scratches on it's exterior, the results of the young man's attempts at learning to drive, and the interior was cluttered with books and trash and a collection of mismatched junk. "Okay, let's see if I can get this on the first try," the young man said to himself. "The car's in park, pump the gas pedal once, foot on the brakes and then..." He turned the key in the ignition and after a few seconds of sputtering the engine roared to life. "Yeah! Thank you Sheila, there's a good car!" The car continued to race and the young man pumped the gas pedal again. The engine slowly grew quieter, but it still worked too hard for the simply task. "Ah well." The young man looked at the car's clock, which was nothing but black. "Come on..." he said as he tapped at it five times. The clock blinked four green numbers before going black again. "Eight o' clock, huh? Well, I'm not too late." The young man turned a knob and the shutters of the car flipped up, shooting twin rays of light into the dark.
He shifted the car into reverse, backed up into the street and took off. He rounded the corner ahead ten miles faster than he should have and he could feel the pull on his car as he shifted directions. The hundred or so pennies on his dashboard slid from right to left, making a cascade of noise and making a smile spread on the young man's face. Four minutes later, he was at his destination. The trailer was nothing special; it had all the looks of your standard white trash paradise, which it might as well be. There were three cars and two trucks jammed into the driveway and six other vehicles parked nearby. The '88 Accord slid into its standard spot next to a neighboring trailer, a place that used to be a nice patch of grass and weeds that had now been reduced to little more that mud. The young man parked and turned the car off. The vehicle's headlights, looking so much like eyes, shut down into the car itself, causing the proud owner to smile again. He looked back to the trailer and took in a deep breath. "Looks like a busy night tonight. Poor Mark." He chuckled and made his way up the walkway, a row of wooden planks sitting side by side. The young man marched up a few steps and stood outside the door a moment as he heard a shout from inside. He smiled hopelessly again and made his way inside.
"Grant!"
"Dude, Grant's here? What's up?"
"You're late!"
"Just in time. We need a ruling on something so c'mon, get set-up and let's go!"
The young man shook his head and put a hand to his forehead as a smile too big for his face tried to form. "Maybe I should leave while it's still safe?" he mumbled to himself. After a moment, he banished the thought. "And miss out on all the fun?" He quickly took in the crowd of people in the house. Nathan, Josh, John, Jessie, Sarah and Tom, not a bad turnout. There was even someone there that Grant didn't know. "I thought Ricky was gonna be here?"
"Yeah," said Josh, one of the four people seated at the dining room table. "He went to Sheetz to grab some caffeine, said he'd be back soon."
"A shame," Grant whispered to himself. He cringed and cursed himself, but the thought remained. He really wished Ricky wasn't there. The guy used to be fun, but he really had no other standout qualities. He'd just gone a little crazy recently and he stopped being fun. Why hang out with him?
Grant banished the thought and moved over to the table. It was just then that he realized how bad off the house was. It was a mess, a pigsty, like a tornado had blown through and a band of hooligans had moved in. Well, the last one was true at any rate, he thought. The table had a collection of dirty dishes piled up on it with newspaper clippings and coupons garnishing the sides. A clear space had been cleaned off where various cards lie strewn about, Josh on one side and Nathan on the other. Grant made a look of disgust as he saw a half liter bottle of coke half-filled with a murky brown substance. "Man, don't leave your spitters on the table, what if someone drank it?" Nathan laughed and brought the bottle to his lips as he let more of the brown liquid dribble from his lips.
Two others sat at the table, Tom and his girlfriend Sarah. They were making a fuss over each other and Grant saw no reason to interrupt their make-out session. Besides, Grant didn't like looking at Sarah, much less talking to her. Tom was all right though. He just didn't see how Tom could do much of anything with the repulsive woman. Not that he would say anything about it, not with Tom's promise of engagement to her. And Tom's criminal background scared Grant a little bit. He knew he shouldn't be, but he was just the least bit intimidated by the street-smart man with a dead daughter and ghosts reminding him of what he'd done before.
Grant shivered a moment before turning to Nathan and Josh. Josh had lit up a cigarette by then and Grant did his best not to make a big deal out of it. "Oh shit," Josh said as he stood up and moved into the kitchen, waving his hand in the air to dispel the smoke as he did so. "Sorry man, I forgot, you're allergic."
He waved it off. "It's cool. I'll live."
"You sure?"
"Yeah, it's fine." Grant took a shallow breath and looked at the wide and jolly young man in front of him. "So what's this problem you're having?"
"Oh yeah, that's right!" Josh took a quick puff of his cigarette before going back to the table and pointing at the collection of cards. "Okay, I attacked with my guy here and Nathan blocked, right? So I threw a volcanic hammer at his guy and killed it. Would my guy hit him since there's no blocker there anymore?"
Grant shook his head. "No. The blocker was assigned. Okay, imagine this. You're a soldier and you're sent to kill this wizard. But another soldier gets in your way. You get ready to fight him when all of a sudden a big fireball drops out of the sky and kills the other soldier. Do you really think you'd be able to keep going and kill the wizard, or would you be distracted and confused? It's the same concept here."
"Which means you don't kill me and I get to take you out next turn. Oooo-right." Nathan adopted a smug smile and leaned back against his chair.
"Man..." Josh sat back. "Whatever, there's always next game. You wanna get in on this next one?"
"Yeah, sure, just let me see what else is going on. I see John's over there, how long's he been playing the 360?" Josh shrugged and Nathan played his finishing blow.
Grant moved off and towards the living area, where John, Jessie and the new guy were situated. John and the new guy were both intently watching the big screen T.V. as they each clutched a controller in their hands. "Still playing Samurai Warriors John? I figured you'd be done with it by now."
"Hey Grant. Nah, we've still got a few guys to beat the game with. Oh yeah, this is Steve."
"Yo," the new guy said, sparing only a slight look back and a wave of his hand. "Man, these pussies keep running away!" He scowled and tapped at the wireless controller furiously.
Grant smiled. "Good, you guys keep playing then. Get my gamerscore nice and high!" Again, as he looked around, he noticed the complete disarray that the house was in. A lamp was tipped over on its side; there was trash and more dirty dishes on the floor, not to mention more bottles and cans, Grant could hardly imagine what these guys could've done to make such a mess. Hadn't he just been there yesterday? It hadn't look anywhere near this bad then! Then again, it could have been the shear amount of people clustering up the place. That might be what was altering his perception.
He shrugged it off and walked back towards the table, nodding at Jessie as he passed. She made a slight nod of her head as well and that was that. Sometimes they talked but never for any great length of time and always in the presence of others. Jessie was John's fiancée. Grant was a friend to Mark and John was his friend, which really meant that they were friends by default. But Grant had trouble with making friends with females. It was no different with Jessie. Still, she was more fun to deal with than Sarah.
It was then that Grant noticed that both Tom and Sarah were gone. He briefly considered asking about it when Tom burst out of the bedroom of Mark's parents, clothed only in his boxers, ran back to his room and then rushed back to where he had come from originally, an item clutched in his teeth which Grant presumed was a condom. Or maybe not, the girl was pregnant already. Tom disappeared and the door slammed behind him, making Grant shudder as he briefly imagined what was going on back there. And in the bedroom of Mark's parents! That was gutsy, or insane! But as for the former gangster running half naked through the house, well, that was something that Grant and everyone else had gotten used to by now. One night a spilled drink, one night a fight, one night you wouldn't be surprised to watch a dead dog walk in. That's just how things were at Mark's place. With about twenty people coming and going at any given point in the day, you came to expect the unexpected, especially when John made the decision to bring home alcohol. Chances were though, that dead dog was going to get dragged in. Shadow was still out hunting after all.
Again Grant's brain managed to pick up on a forgotten factoid. The man of the house, Mark himself, was missing. All of these people were in his house, all of this chaos was going on, and Mark himself wasn't present to appreciate it. Well, that's got to change, Grant thought. "Mark's at Addie's I take it?"
"Yeah," Nathan said as he looked over his hand. "Sorry, we started without you." Grant feigned a glare and Nathan pretended innocence. "What? You were taking too long!" Grant laughed and started for the door. "Hold on," Nathan called after him. "He said he'd be back at about nine, so don't worry about it."
"Aw, c'mon, are you saying I can't have a little fun coming between him and his fiancée?" Grant almost chuckled as a thought came and went. There were too many people getting married in this house.
He turned and headed towards the door, but stopped when he heard a curious sound. There was a long and held sound something between a yell and laughter sounding something like, "Aaaaaaahahahahahaaah!" Grant knew that sound.
A tall guy Grant's age burst through the door, his mouth positioned in a wide grin like a slice of watermelon, his eyes wild and his too long hair just as bad, and he stopped directly in front of Grant. His strange yell laugh slowly tapered off as he patted Grant's shoulder and he smiled. Ricky looked like he was supposed to. A little crazy, but happy. "Dude! Grant, what's up!"
"Nothin' much, how're you doing Ricky?"
"Awww, dude," He exclaimed in an exaggerated voice, "I'm doing great! Just got back, I got a couple of Jolts with me, I'm set for the night!" He moved past Grant and to the table next to Nathan and Josh. "Hey, do we got any rum?" Grant hoped not. Ricky was an asshole when he drank. Then again, he was also an asshole when he was with his girlfriend Britt, and now that they were an item again Ricky tended to vacillate between depression and anger. Not a lot of fun to be around.
Grant was briefly reminded of his promise to himself, of his Three Great Truths as he was calling it. And yet he couldn't go through with his promise. He needed to tell Ricky what needed to be told, but he couldn't do it. Not alone. And as much as he wanted Mark's assistance, Mark was fully intent on taking care of the problem himself. But it still hurt to see Ricky hurt by that woman. It was easy to say that he only used his friends for entertainment but when the shit hit the fan he did something. Or at least he tried. That was something he was pretty proud of too. But not this time. The first Great Truth would have to wait just a bit longer.
"Nah," John said from the living room. "We ran out of just about everything last night." Grant breathed a sigh of relief.
"Damn. Ah well. Oh, and Grant?" He turned and looked at him questioningly. "I brought some friends."
Grant felt a presence behind him just as a pair of hands came under his arms and grabbed his chest. He lunged forward, out of the grasp, and turned back, shouting indignantly, "Woah, what the hell! Yeah, my personal space bubble? Invaded!"
"Silly Grant, you don't get 'personal space' when we're here." Grant groaned and stepped closer to the table, away from the two newcomers.
Ricky laughed. "I brought the Knockers."
"Yeah, that's great," Grant mumbled, "but dude, why? Seriously, what's so interesting about my moobs? C'mon! It's just... creepy." He promised himself then and there that he wouldn't laugh the next time a girl got groped from behind in an anime. But he had a bad habit of lying to himself. Besides, since when did guys grope other guys?
Josh, first of the brothers and the guilty party, pushed his way through to the table as he laughed casually and ignored his question. Always exuberant Josh, or Sheepy when around the other Josh, so as to prevent confusion, quickly squeezed his way into the Magic game. The second brother was slower into the door. Grant had always thought that Daniel seemed to be behind everyone most of the time, staying in the back and away from things. He was a dark haired, cynical and depressed youth, but he integrated himself in as well, if a bit slower.
Seeing Daniel was bad for Grant. Or at least, that was how he interpreted the feelings he was receiving, negative thoughts and emotions, because Daniel reminded him of Belinda, due to the strange and intimate relationship the two had once shared. Grant shivered a moment as he considered that mess that was his only close female relationship beyond kinship. She was his first real female friend and he'd let things go in a way they shouldn't have, especially considered all of her problems. He hated to think of it, any of it, it just disgusted and horrified him to the core of his being, not only what had happened to her, but what he had wanted to happen. And there lie the second of the Three Great Truths. He knew, he needed to tell her what he'd been holding back. Grant knew he had to sever the bonds for him to be happy. But could he do that to her? Again he cursed his guilt and his emotions from preventing him from making the healthy choice. The second truth would have to wait as well.
As Daniel moved to close the door behind him, a black cat sauntered in through the opening. He slowly and purposefully moved towards the living room. Daniel shut the door behind him just as an excited voice cried, "Shadow!" Grant moved to see what the fuss was about to find that Jessie was holding the black cat in her arms. "Look at you, what did you get in a fight with now?"
"A bear," Grant joked.
"He probably won too," laughed John. Jessie placed the cat down as she moved to the bathroom.
Shadow sat there, with one cheek cut open and a pair of gashes on his leg, calm and waiting. Grant shook his head, amazed. "That's the freakin' Lu Bu of Cats." Shadow yawned as Jessie returned, bearing a bottle of peroxide and a box of q-tips, and began patting at one of the cat's new wounds. The animal waited through it stoically, further urging Grant to shake his head in disbelief.
Shortly after his return to the living room, Grant noticed something entirely out of place. "What the hell is that doing here?" He pointed at a bottle of Pepsi by Steve's chair. Next to it was a bottle of Coke, half filled with the murky brown liquid produced by the tobacco chewers in the house.
Steve looked up, questioningly. "What's his problem?"
John shook his head. "He's a, uh, Coke fan. He doesn't like Pepsi."
Steve seemed about to say something as Grant held up a hand and sighed, a look of resignation on his face. "No, it's nothing. I should be used to it by now." He shrugged and opened an eye to look at the new guy. "I guess there's just no accounting for some people's taste."
Steve laughed. "Shit, man, don't go screwin' around like that!" He turned away and back towards the TV, smiling and shaking his head, muttering curses. Grant nodded in satisfaction, Steve was all right.
He stepped back and melded in with the crowd at the table, keeping an eye on the players as two warriors fought their way through an endless swarm of soldiers on the screen. "Oh, by the way," John called over his shoulder, now deeply immersed into the game, "are we playing DnD tonight?"
"Maybe," Grant replied indifferently.
"Cool, you should set Steven up with a character then." John looked over to his partner and nodded. "You're cool with that, right?"
"Hell yeah," was Steve's response. "Set me up with that shit."
Grant chuckled and shrugged again, feigning apathy. "Yeah, I guess. Nothing to it then. Gimme a sec though." It was a good night. He was feeling pretty well off, and looking at John, he couldn't help but remember that third and most exciting of promises to himself, of reminding him of John's stepsister Cassie and what she represented. Not just the relationship with her, but with the honesty he was prepared to embrace in any relationship. Grant felt more calm and content than he had for a long time these past few days. But still, none of the truths would come, not even this most pleasant of the three. What was holding him back? Still he argued with himself as he tried to discover the answer, yet it just wouldn't come. There was always that apprehension that gnawed at his very being.
He sighed and cast another look at the two playing the 360 and watched as Steve brought a .5 liter bottle of Coke to his face. He took a swig before lurching forward suddenly, capping the bottle, and rushing to the bathroom. As John and Jessie snickered and giggled, Grant took note of the bottle left on Steve's chair, the bottle now only a quarter full of murky brown sludge. "I said something like this would happen."
There was a clamor from outside again and Grant rushed to the table to get a look at the front door. In through the door burst Mark, his eyes light and his smile wide, saying in exaggerated tones, "What's going on everybody!" The house burst in laughter and greeting and Grant found himself swept along in the tide of it all. The night was young, just 8:20, and there was so much fun to be had. These were the kind of nights made for people like them, just a night of fun with no worries about the consequences or of what might happen tomorrow. It was the kind of night where you threw caution away and almost anything could happen. It was another seven or so hours till dawn as Mark shut the door and Shadow slipped through at the last second. Who knew? There might still be time for that dog to show up.
I'll try to remember that these are supposed to be short stories in the future. My apologies!
Seeing as we've all made our first week's entry, let's move on to the next subject. I believe I had the next topic choice? I'm not really good at this sort of thing but I'll give it a shot.
Construct a writing that develops a character and leads the audience in a certain direction. Then, bring about an unexpected result. Plot twist practice, in other words.
The deadline is 3/11. I added a day since I'm kind of getting a head start with the topic. Let's get some feedback on these last few posts going if we can as well, if we can squeeze it in between writing of course! As for me, well, feeling kind of beat. I'll double check both of your works tomorrow and hopefully offer a better critique.